tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post5482143002589843326..comments2024-03-28T02:36:55.037-04:00Comments on Brooklyn Arden: Principles of Line-EditingCherylhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05972029478350879112noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-13455372880513549602011-04-19T02:30:23.696-04:002011-04-19T02:30:23.696-04:00I've picked up a couple of points that I had b...I've picked up a couple of points that I had been overlooking. Thanks for sharing.Mynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07595087387069634003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-74103852809342572702011-04-18T20:42:40.131-04:002011-04-18T20:42:40.131-04:00Hi there--I followed a link from Janice Hardy'...Hi there--I followed a link from Janice Hardy's blog, so I haven't read your posts before.<br /><br />You gave some great tips here, but the one that startled me was saying that chapter two was <i>supposed</i> to be backstory. I'll have to go through some of my books and look for that pattern for myself.José Iriartehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03653811568201804995noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-67050235857612265902008-06-16T01:52:00.000-04:002008-06-16T01:52:00.000-04:00Very interesting. I think it is fascinating to lea...Very interesting. I think it is fascinating to learn about what goes on on the other side of the fence as it were. I love, love, love finding about craft.<BR/><BR/>I enjoyed the article about you in the Carletonian, and finally got around to trying discover more.Michelle Styleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03400990189443593076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-3330412348212548822007-06-21T01:20:00.000-04:002007-06-21T01:20:00.000-04:00I liked reading this very much. Thanks!I liked reading this very much. Thanks!Ritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03823648489427679440noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-81742986794965561252007-06-17T12:45:00.000-04:002007-06-17T12:45:00.000-04:00Thank you, this is wonderful advice!Thank you, this is wonderful advice!writtenwyrddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02280711822302493122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-91580706110579314872007-06-17T10:47:00.000-04:002007-06-17T10:47:00.000-04:00(Oops! signed into my other blog. That was from me...(Oops! signed into my other blog. That was from me!)<BR/>:-)<BR/><BR/>(And I just reread Sorceror Stone this week so it was fun seeing your examples there.)Laini Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14064837312936707024noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-20579900473430553872007-06-17T10:44:00.000-04:002007-06-17T10:44:00.000-04:00Great post! It reminds me how HARD writing is! (ok...Great post! It reminds me how HARD writing is! (okay, I hadn't actually forgetten that.) This is the kind of thing I always HOPE to get out of an SCBWI workshop and don't always get -- lists of concrete things. Thank you!Sunday Scribblingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13112064409346333625noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-87626676262159621362007-06-16T17:20:00.000-04:002007-06-16T17:20:00.000-04:00Ah, now I see! Thanks!Ah, now I see! Thanks!lizzy_lynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12440553174754279495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-81651382018038527632007-06-16T17:03:00.000-04:002007-06-16T17:03:00.000-04:00Oh, so helpful, thank you!I recently attended a co...Oh, so helpful, thank you!<BR/><BR/>I recently attended a conference where Dial Editor Nancy Mercado said she considered facial expressions, body language and the like a form of telling, rather than showing. A real eye-opener for me! Interesting to see you reference something similar here.<BR/><BR/>Like they say, if it were easy, everyone would be writing kids books!LindaBudzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09290094983584931044noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-74287085376824850472007-06-16T15:27:00.000-04:002007-06-16T15:27:00.000-04:00I had to go out of town midway through your guest ...I had to go out of town midway through your guest week at teenlitauthors, and when I got back it was over. BUT. I'm printing everything out to memorize and tattoo onto my brain. THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU for all your thoughtful answers (and for coming back to my question about the mss that almost make it)!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-50938354941957925172007-06-16T13:15:00.000-04:002007-06-16T13:15:00.000-04:00Lizzy, here's an example of a topic sentence and a...Lizzy, here's an example of a topic sentence and a fermata, both in asterisks, both from SORCERER'S STONE:<BR/><BR/>D) "**Nothing like this man had ever been seen on Privet Drive.** He was tall, thin, and very old, judging by the silver of his hair and beard, which were both long enough to tuck into his belt. He was wearing long robes, a purple cloak that swept the ground, and high-heeled, buckled boots."<BR/><BR/>Such topic sentences aren't necessary for every paragraph, of course, but they're useful in paragraphs of narrated action or description like this one; they orient the reader or tell him/her the significance of the information, and the rest of the paragraph fills out the details.<BR/><BR/>E) [end of Chapter 9] "But Hermione had given Harry something else to think about as he climbed back into bed. The dog was guarding something. . . . What had Hagrid said? Gringotts was the safest place in the world for something you wanted to hide -- except perhaps Hogwarts.<BR/><BR/>***It looked as though Harry had found out where the grubby little package from vault seven hundred and thirteen was.***"<BR/><BR/>This pulls all the clues given in this chapter together into a dramatic conclusion, and most certainly gives you a reason to keep reading!Cherylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05972029478350879112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-27054972169479603382007-06-16T03:14:00.000-04:002007-06-16T03:14:00.000-04:00Thanks again for your insight this week on the tee...Thanks again for your insight this week on the teenlit authors listserv! <BR/><BR/>I live overseas (6 hours ahead of E.S.T.) and a few times I saw your answers pop up in the morning (for me), which meant you were up LATE answering our questions...here's wishing you plenty of sleep this weekend. :-)Nataliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14119053515951615279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-36075077126147181582007-06-15T22:31:00.000-04:002007-06-15T22:31:00.000-04:00c is a good thing to know. Wish I would have known...c is a good thing to know. Wish I would have known this a few years ago.<BR/><BR/>Could you give an example of d and e? <BR/><BR/>:)lizzy_lynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12440553174754279495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-17918116712249715682007-06-15T21:31:00.000-04:002007-06-15T21:31:00.000-04:00Wow. Thank you so much. I feel like I should hang ...Wow. Thank you so much. I feel like I should hang this over my desk, aka, regular table at Starbucks.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-79921255828514578392007-06-15T11:02:00.000-04:002007-06-15T11:02:00.000-04:00Thank you, thank you! I'll be using your points to...Thank you, thank you! I'll be using your points to look over my work.Stephanie J. Blakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17997433466625207454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-68475270437150093772007-06-15T10:33:00.000-04:002007-06-15T10:33:00.000-04:00*Very* helpful, Miss C!And don't forget: kill your...*Very* helpful, Miss C!<BR/><BR/>And don't forget: kill your babies!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-17591175881234575012007-06-15T09:58:00.000-04:002007-06-15T09:58:00.000-04:00Ah ... so THAT's what you meant when you said that...Ah ... so THAT's what you meant when you said that my MC from Symphonians should have positive energy!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for the list.Melinda R. Cordellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02924404257237523106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-6057021694214044892007-06-15T07:52:00.000-04:002007-06-15T07:52:00.000-04:00This was really helpful, Cheryl!!Keep blogging!This was really helpful, Cheryl!!<BR/><BR/>Keep blogging!Sharanyahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10854112156033972511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4074861.post-9683382966788158902007-06-15T07:39:00.000-04:002007-06-15T07:39:00.000-04:00Great advice...I printed this one out to keep. Tha...Great advice...I printed this one out to keep. Thanks!angelarenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13639436719051155045noreply@blogger.com